You make some keen observations about life in this piece. However, I found it hard to understand the full message of this piece because there was no punctuation. To help you figure out where key moment of pause should be,...

i really liked their title.

For opinion seven, I believe "college" and "too" are spelled just a letter off. Besides that the grammar seems good.

I love your writing sm :"))))

I'm not really sure what is happening in this piece but it has a mystic feel so that might be intentional

I really like how most of your opinions are an overall view of human beings and how to treat them.

It is great but indent your story.

Sounds amazing so far! Keep up the good work.

There was some edits, I highlited them, click on them to see what they are.

Love this poem, it's very lyrical.

I really admire the creative idea behind this piece! It's not very often I read a 'stream-of-consciousness' post on Write The World, but yours was so intriguing I had to click on it. I would love to see it expanded...

I think the lines "I despise you", and "I still love you" are interesting because they contradict each other but, in a way, they still make sense. This is a really cool perspective and I like all of the added...

Really nice job!

One more thing, what's One's motivations? I know this may be for down the line, but I find a character so much more interesting if they want something. Maybe have One look out the window and long for being out...

Again, the humor is really nice because it adds personality and character to this "Recipe". Also it makes you think about yourself and how much you relate to the piece, it's nice to laugh at yourself every now and again....

Hopefully some of my comments are helpful for you. There's just a few grammar mistakes and run-on sentences in this piece, but I highlighted most of them, and they should be easy to fix. I enjoyed reading your piece, and...

I liked how it kinda takes a creepy turn in the middle of the article

One thing I would consider is adding a little more description though :D

Amazing work, just maybe take into consideration of explaining more into detail!

I love it!

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