This poem is very beautiful. The last line focuses not only on the idea of how you view yourself but also on the overall passage of time. It's like a flash; taking the reader from a fantasy or deep thought...

Again, this is just beautiful and so heart-wrenching, I absolutely love it.

Hi Yolanda! I have very much enjoyed reading your work, and I think you have great potential as a writer. My comments are only my opinions, so feel free to ignore them when you feel it necessary. I hope I've...

Ok so I reviewed an earlier version of this and nearly had a heart attack when I realised that it wasn't there anymore. But alas it it. These new additions only increase the beauty that this piece already held. It...

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This was a very relatable piece. Becoming a teenager is hard indeed, and you portray that beautifully in your piece. I'm in no position to give you advice: I'm 16 and still in the same place as you are in...

This is such a wonderful piece! Do publish more pieces like this in the future. Also, welcome to the WtW community. I am looking forward to reading what you come up with next :)

Even your message to the readers is poetic and beautiful. Is it possible to fall in love with someone because of their writing? Maybe, because isn't writing so often what we are really thinking? And surely you can love someone...

Stunning poem

Just so, so good.

I love this a lot. It really made me feel. This style of writing is beautiful and your voice really carries through the piece.

Really good. The tempo is nice and I love the imagery that your language conjures- a lonely soul and a lonely ocean.

So, so good. You should definitely submit it to the competition!

The whole piece is stunning and I really enjoyed reading it.

you did great

I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing this piece. All these comments are just my opinion, so don't feel pressure to integrate where you don't feel necessary. Amazing work, and good luck with the competition!

this was absolutely stunning! you do you <3

Overall, you are an amazing writer and I love your story. And whether you choose to follow my advice or not, your imagination and ability to portray imagery is really quite unique. I encourage you to continue writing amazing stories...

I really like it! I think I have a somewhat similar writing style and so I love your use of language and the pace of the piece.

I love this poem, and you have an amazing knack for writing.

try to avoid run on sentences because they can get you confused about the main gist of your sentence. you can read out your essay to yourself because it helps you to make sense of your own writing! (this helps...

Keep it up! You're doing amazing and I hope to see more and more from you!

I really loved this and I can tell you that you can sew!

Hi sophiabrown0671! This was a really strong entry; you should be proud. My comments are just my opinions, so feel free to ignore them when you feel it necessary. I hope I've been helpful.
Have a wonderful day!

I really loved this piece and it kind of gave me a little pick me up reading it and made me smile.