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You gave an immensely perceptive and fresh take on the idea of utopia or end of the world, and this entire poem, including your very comprehensive footnote, gave a cohesive and complete conveyance of this.
I think this poem doesn't need any change or additional detail. I was already impressed and blown away by how intricate and subtle you characterized the speaker and the world he/she is living in. You were also very creative with the structure; your use of italicization and punctuation effectively gave an interesting and intriguing flow to your poem. You were also very clever in encapsulating really insightful and thought-provoking ideas in extensive, pauseless exposition, which considerably increased the power and immediacy of the words you were presenting.
Very remarkable poem! I hope this peer review may help you, and I am looking forward to devouring your other works!