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i feel i could dissect this poem for hours. for one thing, it's fabulously written––the italics are particularly impressive, portraying unique personification and a new meaning to "hope". additionally, every line seems to carries a unique idea with it. you have so many wonderful philosophies in one piece, such as the ambiguity of hopelessness and hope; the solace of screens; the idea that WE make the world round (which is really interesting because it reveals something about the ego of scientific discovery, etc); the infinite cycle of society; and of course the takeover of nature once again. i find something new every time i read.
some of your points were unclear; i wasn't sure how they tied in to the ideas of the poem. i highlighted most of those instances; be sure to go back and elaborate/correct them. i would also recommend changing the title––"utopia with a capital 'u'" doesn't make sense because you never use a capital "u" when you use the word "utopia" in the poem, except at the end when every letter is capitalized. i think you'd do better to name the poem afer hope, the shapes in the stars, ways to say goodbye, or some other use of "utopia" that fits better.
incredible job! your language is lovely and your ideas are relentlessly fascinating. i read this poem again and again. i apologize if i seemed at all harsh; i criticized this poem merely because i love it so much and i wanted to make it as great as it can be. keep writing forever because the world needs your creativity and intellect.
if you do revise, be sure to notify me so i can read :)