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The combination of the good and bad side software the planet specially the way they were placed in the world.
Yeah Tom and Ron's parents. I really want to know everything about them like what had actually happened to them and from where did they come from in the end.
Yes the part where it was written that Tom and Ron are Zo's twins and the places where the present and the past tense were kind of fussed.
This is a very good idea and this would make an amazing story and even a novel series. To take this story further,the author could get into details of Tom and Ron's parents and the sceptre and the HTB
This is a very beautiful story but I am a bit confused due to its formation. There are times when present tense is used and suddenly past tense comes. I think this story should be rewritten in the correct tense. Otherwise this is an amazing story and I would strongly recommend the author to continue writing it.