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The title, and first line of "Unnamed girl"
The author created a heartbreaking piece, always showing not telling, and using the amount of words to her/his/their favor. Every sentence seems like it's right where it belongs, and all the words are into place.
Not at all!
I'm begging you to keep writing, you see the world through glasses full of compassion and self-reflection. This had a lot of thought put into it, and it shows. The last line is especially heartbreaking, and a real punch to the gut.
Best of luck in the competition! This has been my favorite piece so far :)