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OOF alright- The way you wove together all these biblical references and details was absolutely stunning, and your way of describing all these situations and emotions as if they came straight out of an epic novel is too clever for words. What really surprised about this one is how loud your writing voice is, I could've recognized it was yours without knowing who wrote it or the situation. The imagery is stunning, as always, and overall, it all feels melancholic and bittersweet. The picture of the devil as an egocentric man who didn't know when to stop, and the emotional pahses of the angel as their relationship progressed, it just gave me goosebumps. Chapeau!
I think the detail about the "snakes" could've been sown a bit deeper into the story, like perhaps tying them to Adam and Eve, or the devil himself. Overall, this story is so complete I don't make much to say for this section.
I love your explorations on feelings, and even if your stories are lengthy, they feel short. You've got such a clear and clever writing voice, I'm yearning for more already. Keep on writing, queen!