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Message to Readers
I would like feedback on my choice of words and overall plot of the story.
This story makes me want to keep reading by all of the detail and all of the little things that happens in the story.
The author makes the story feel like a living person by adding things that you would see in a everyday life.
Some scenes that I would like to expand is when the character sees the metal box because there is not much detail explaining about the metal box.
Something that would help make the setting better is to add detail about the setting.
Some encouragement that I would have for the author is to keep doing what they are doing.