CrazyNinjaKid

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Message to Readers

Who speaks Irish here??

a athair #126 contest --REVIEW SWAP PLEASE COMMENT BELOW :)

May 30, 2020

FREE WRITING

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ruptures my fragile soul,
rhythmic peace distorted, 
shallow breathless gasps,
dread filled introspection's awakened, 
wildly roams previewing visions,  
echos repeating, over and over, 
mind whirling, intimate voices,
violent nightmares, triggered painstakingly,
harshly crush the heart-wrenching memories, 
afraid, traumatised, painfully alone, 
floating like a child's sail boat,
drowning in a lost sea of confusion.

acceptation of the final stand
heart pounding, pound after pound
shattering fiercely, glass of a million pieces,
risks unleashed, jeopardised, threatening self,
following heart, ignoring mind,
defying weakness, disregarding soul,
be a saviour, a want to be warrior,
all for this one person,
for the loyalty wouldn't be returned.

 
First Published: 22/05/2020
Word Count: 103

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13 Comments
  • Vinter Vejen

    Just choose any of mine :)


    6 days ago
  • Vinter Vejen

    Would love a review swap!!


    6 days ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Thanks for the entry however the link you sent doesn't work :( Would you mind resending. So sorry !


    11 days ago
  • Just_A_Memory

    :O


    12 days ago
  • Ahsan Nizaam

    Loyalty is almost never returned. Very relatable and awesome choice of words


    12 days ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Created My 50 follower contest :)) Would love if you'd have a look ! Thanks for the advice!!
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/168550/version/332138


    14 days ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Thank you so much!!


    14 days ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    Replying: Any suggestions for prompts?


    14 days ago
  • Chloe :) <3

    This piece is amazing!!


    14 days ago
  • fatpanda

    replying: yeah sure!


    14 days ago
  • Destiny_the_writer

    Felt this deep in my soul. Great job


    14 days ago
  • Busssy.Beee

    This is really good!


    14 days ago
  • fatpanda

    hello, i'm sorry but i'll have to disqualify this piece. i don't think you've used science at all in this poem, and i was looking for entries written from only a scientific point-of-view, which, unfortunately, this entry is not. however, you're free to enter something else under the same prompt if you wish! :)


    15 days ago