therisingwriter

Rwanda

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Hi - Just wanna write!
Family, Environment, Love
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Message to Readers

I really don't know the essence of this(I am trying out currently)... I was thinking of something fun to write about and this came up... any suggestions to make it better and more pleasing are highly appreciated!

sleep

November 22, 2020

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The journey to the land,
Sweet and fragrant when youngsters
A sec makes the shoot
Never know when you are gone
Sleep slight, dreams in the land
Gorgeous sheets, mottled in green
the shining skies
Deep in blue

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6 Comments
  • Bhavya's Treasure

    The dreamy and other worldly feelings are making me feel surreal and indeed sleepy. XD
    I liked how you said, 'Deep in blue'
    It kinds of feel like deep in sleep. :D
    Also,

    When youngsters
    A sec makes the shoot
    I didn't get it completely here. May you explain? :)

    Re: I will be waiting to read my review again. :)
    Yes, I have enrolled in IIT BHU (Varanasi) in Electrical Engineering and today only my online classes have begun.
    All the best for your college admission too. Do tell me when the admission is confirmed. ;)
    Oh wow, I don't remember but you remembered. Your follow up is stunning too man! :D

    Good day, Bertrand!


    9 days ago
  • HOT_IN_THE_RAIN

    re: Hi! Glad you liked my piece!
    And honestly, your poem covers all the beauties of sleep perfectly!


    10 days ago
  • Halopoet

    Re: thanks, Im glad you enjoyed my piece. And i hope you enjoy your walks too!


    10 days ago
  • Rohan’s Defender (Rudolph’s Defender #holidayvibes)

    Re: thank you so much!! :) :)


    10 days ago
  • sci-Fi

    this is what I should be doing rn....
    beautifully poetic, therisingwriter!


    11 days ago
  • Rohan’s Defender (Rudolph’s Defender #holidayvibes)

    LOVELY! This is beautiful!


    11 days ago