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I love the description you give about the story. It instantly hooks me!
I think you could cut down on the description of what the plot is. If you make it more concise, you can include more about how you feel about the book.
This could be even stronger if you picked out reasons as to why you loved the book and talked about that more rather than talking about the plot. You can also add some quotes to give a glimpse of the author's voice.
I think you have a great start and you can totally make this even better!
Btw, I wrote a book review too. It would be great if you could check it out and write a review! Thanks!