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Breanna Jury

New Zealand

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I'm an aspiring author/novelist that's trying to branch out more and improve my writing

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) reviewed:

The Gift of Life

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition

I'd maybe introduce Hawthorn and the cops a little earlier, because I think the beginning is a bit slow compared to the pace and exposition at the end.

5 days ago

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6 days ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) reviewed:

The Offseason

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition

I really love the action at the end, could you add a bit more into the beginning? Maybe introduce the prince a bit earlier in the story?

6 days ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) published:

Lies

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition

I never realised until today how much everyone lies. Not until I started getting this bitter taste in my mouth every time someone did. The acrid taste of 'I'm fine' still coats my tongue after breakfast with my family. 
I'm amazed I haven't thrown up yet.  
As Tara pulls into my driveway, all I want to do is go back to my room and hide. I should have cancelled. 
But she waves and opens the door for me, and I can't resist...

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7 days ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) liked The Offseason by lindazhang (Canada)

9 days ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) published:

Damnation

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2019

“Did it hurt when you fell from heaven?”
Yes
I raged and burned as bright as the sun.
I reached for stars and solar systems and galaxies to slow my plummet
decaying feathers slipped past me into the abyss


as I fell
                and fell
                                and fell.
 
Is this pain? This searing ache across my skin?
I don’t like it. I want to go back.
my soul shreds and my wings burst into impossible flames as I fall ...

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3 months ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) published:

Damnation

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2019

“Did it hurt when you fell from heaven?”

Yes
I raged and burned as bright as the sun.
I reached for stars and solar systems and galaxies to slow my fall
decaying feathers slipped past me into the abyss
as I fell
                and fell
                                and fell.
Is this pain? This burning ache across my skin?
I don’t like it. I want to go back.
my skin burns and my wings burst into impossible flames as I fall
to...

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3 months ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) published:

Damnation

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2019

Artemis.
Moonlit maiden,
Goddess of the eternal hunt.
 
“Turn away from the company of men.”
But I am no man, and when I kissed her
My tears were made of starlight for weeks.
 
“Join the eternal hunt.”
And when I held her hand
We ran through the forest until not even the dawn could reach us.
 
“Accept the blessing of immortality.”
And when I touched her
I dreamt of wolves tearing the sky itself apart.
 
-...

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3 months ago

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about 1 year ago

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Breanna Jury (New Zealand) published:

How to Not Die 101

PROMPT: Science Fiction Competition 2018

I heard that in the machine age, people would write these things called biographies. Well, if there was a book written on my life, it’d be called ‘How to Be a Failure 101’. Or perhaps ‘My Life is an Absolute Train Wreck’. 
Either way, you get the point. My life is a disaster.  
I started my day by lighting my hair on fire - accidentally, of course. I never know driftboard wires could spark that much. That whole catastrophe made...

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about 1 year ago